Blooregard Q. Kazoo

Man, I hate Jeremy. What an effin' deuschbag. How the hell does he think he is? I mean, what's his problem anyway? So yeah, here are my thoughts... I didn't ...

I haven't read any others yet, but I thought I'd comment on just the general style of this piece. You're shooting for a newspaper style, and it's largely a hit. ...

Pretty good. "Its lost in the misty maze; " Its should be It's. "Down paths of conflicting emotions," In the context that this is written, it seems like Down should ...

Right... I'm not even going to bother critiquing your grammar; too many mistakes to count. In any case, you also obviously don't have a clue what you're talking about. Maybe ...

You get points for passion, but you need to proofread this. Due to how short it is, there really aren't any excuses for poor grammar, especially when you spell "great" ...

Yay for post-apocalyptic stories! Don't know why, but I always get excited when I read "The Former United States of America." Although please don't get me wrong as the USA ...

I'm going to read the second part after this, though maybe not tonight. Firstly, I like the plot and the idea of a new evolution along with the idea of ...

This story has me confused. In the beginning, the robot is just that, a robot. You make it clear that his responses are programmed in, and thus it's reasonable for ...

The first thing Joe is that you may find more success with this piece on another venue, such as or critiquecircle.com. You might also try wordtrip.com. While the Young Writers ...

I loved this! You're rhyming structure and humor reminds me very much of a Dr. Seuss story. How you chose to structure your poem works incredibly well. Indeed, none of ...

Hi nothingface and welcome to the site! I'm afraid that I'm pretty much a new member as well, but maybe we can commiserate together? I won't touch on what Fand ...

You're from the U.A.E.? That's awesome! I mean, I've never ever been there, but I've never met anyone from there before. THAT IS SO COOL!! :) The first thing you ...

This is a rather frustrating poem to read. You've told us the speaker is tired emotionally, but never tell us why, and I want to know why! What's wrong? Who ...

Don't read this while listening to Flogging Molly. The two don't fit. Anyhow, your tone remains consistent throughout, and the flow remains uninterrupted. As Fand pointed out, you have a ...

I like the idea of setting a story fifty years after a zombie outbreak. Gives you a chance to go into all the rebuilding still taking place, the scars that ...